Smooth Criminal

Have you ever had a song that wouldn’t get out of your head? That’s what has happened to me the last couple of days.

I have had the song, “Smooth Criminal” by Michael Jackson stuck in my head. I thought why in the world do I have this song infiltrated in my brain. It occurred to me to make it a prompt for a story before I went to sleep the other night, but then I forgot about it when I woke up.

I was perusing the Facebook newsfeed and guess what song I saw on a video. You guessed it. So, I got the computer out last night and started typing this up.

I read somewhere that Michael was inspired by the fact that medical personal were taught to say in CPR classes, “Annie, are you okay?” Even though paramedics are supposed to call the person by name sometimes out of habit they would call the patient Annie. Below is my story inspired by the song “Smooth Criminal”


Annie glared at her stalker through the long pane window. He was shouting at her, but she just saw his arms flailing up and down as he screamed. She could see the crow bar in his hand. Tap.Tap.Tap.

“Oh Lawd. He’s going to break the window.” Annie said as she bolted to the dining room.

The sound of  the shattering glass filled her ears.

“Annie.” He hollered.

Tears were pelting down her face. There was nowhere to hide. She slid under the dining room tablecloth. Praying he didn’t look for her there.

“Annie, you got nowhere to run. It’s just you and me. You shouldn’t have changed the locks Annie. Did you really think that I would leave you alone? That a restraining order would stop me. You are mine and the law ain’t going to tell me any different.”

Her hands were trembling as she covered her mouth to muffle her cries. She could hear the glass crunching beneath his boots.

He paid no attention to the shards of glass imbedded in his skin. He patiently made his way to the dining room. He could hear her breathing and the muffled cries.

“Annie, Come out, Come out wherever you are. “

He turned into the dining room. Whimpers came from under the table.

“Annie you shouldn’t have ran from me.” She could see his boots as he circled around the table.

“I thought you loved me. You promised to love me and cherish me. I pay your bills. I buy your food, and this is how you repay me. Annie, Annie, Annie. Didn’t your momma teach you better?”

He stopped circling the table. Annie clutched her arms around her legs and laid her head on her knees. She was shaking uncontrollably now.

“Please, don’t hurt me, Dexter. I won’t run again. I won’t lock you out. I’m promise,” she said crawling out from under the table.

“Why should I believe that? No, I think we are long past that. See, I think if I can’t have you. I’m not going to let anyone have you.”

Dexter grabbed Annie’s black hair and rubbed his hands across her face. He pulled her up to his chest while her hair remained in his hand.

“I’ve never killed somebody before. You’ll be my first. You’ve been a first for me in many ways Annie. “


The policeman walked through the broken remains of the window.

“Annie. Annie are you okay? The officer didn’t miss the bloody footsteps that ensued out of the dining room. When he reached the dining room, he discovered Annie laid on the floor with a gunshot wound to her chest.”

“Annie are you okay?”

Annie didn’t respond.


He watched from the woods as they covered Annie on the gurney. Dexter didn’t see the young man watching him as he fled through the woods, but the young man would never forget him.

The weeks that followed Annie’s death Dexter told the tale to anyone that would listen. The police didn’t come looking for him . He had paid them off. His brothers didn’t snitch on him either. They knew what would happen if they did.

“Hey Smooth Criminal.” That’s how they greeted him.

Dexter would stop and see Annie’s boy at his grandmother’s from time to time. He always made it a point to inform the boy that if there was anything he ever needed not to hesitate to contact him.

Annie Miller’s case like so many others went untouched and Dexter grew bolder in his crimes.


Fifteen years later a new police chief took over the Anaheim Police Department. He instructed them to open up the cold case of Annie Miller.   He was so sure of who the murderer was that he called him the Smooth Criminal. He had been planning for this moment since he was sixteen years old.

He was there when the judge read Dexter Clement the verdict. He walked up to his mother’s convicted killer and looked him in the eye.

“I made a promise to myself that I would apprehend you if it was the last thing I do. It looks like I made good on my promise Smooth Criminal. My mother can finally rest in peace.”


18 thoughts on “Smooth Criminal

    1. Thank you milliethom. I knew that Annie would die, but I didn’t know the police chief would be her son until I was watching a movie, and the thought just came. I was thinking about plots and twists. I appreciate your comments. 🙂

      1. I think that’s what everyone really wants, especially on the challenges. Everyone needs to know whether their story actually worked, or their grammar and punctuation are OK. Most people don’t object to constructive criticism, either. I like to know myself if something doesn’t make sense. But wecan only read as many posts as we have time for. The Friday Fictioneers has so many entries (80+) it’s impossible to read and comment on them all!

      2. I know very little about homeschooling, though I imagine you have to follow all the curriculums for various subjects. Will you still teach them at home when they get older?

      3. I will although there are some things that I will purchase with DVD’s that have instructors to accompany the curriculum. They also have an online school that they take part in as well.

      4. You have a few years of work ahead – but you obviously enjoy it and think it’s best for your boys. So I wish you well with it. I taught 11-18 year olds for many years and loved it. There are so many things online nowadays, as you say.

  1. An intense story! Loved the glass crunching under his boots. I could feel her panic. When you started the paragraph – The weeks that followed Annie’s death he… at first I wasn’t sure if you were talking about the young man who was watching, or Dexter. Maybe you could put Dexter’s name instead of he? Another suggestion- “I won’t lock you out. I’m promise.” She said crawling out from under the table – “I” instead of “I’m” and after promise put a comma and ‘she’ has a lower case s. Hope that makes sense!

    1. Aww… thank you. I couldn’t get this song out of my head. Thanks for commenting. I’m glad he was caught too. I don’t really plan my stories, so most of the time the ending is a surprise to me until right before I write it. 🙂

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